neat combination!
this is really interesting. experimentations like this really pay off. IBM beat isn't something you'd think of when you hear 'classical guitar'... it had a really nice sound and mood.
the synths in the background are a little powerful at times. im glad you took 'em down a notch at one point. and i think the synth is also a little too wet or has too much flanger at times. that balance between your instruments is probably the only thing you need to get down.
5/5
-crepth
Thanks, I appreciate the review!
cool song.
i think the overall instrument choice was pretty good, they go nicely together. with perhaps the exception of the marimba thing... i think its part in the song was a little weak... probably more melody wise than mastering wise- it demands so much attention because of its sound but its notes are a little generic and sticking to the chord note o.O i didn't explain that very well. when or if you repost, elaborate on that instrument. my favorite part of the song was when you picked up with the clap at like 1:49ish or something. so damn catchy. in the remake of this, i think you should do more of those parts (have more of a concentration on percussion.) basically, i think there were several places in which a stronger melody would have helped. this is really the strongest foundation for an awesome song that you can get.
5/5
-crepth
Thanks, Crepth!
By the marimba, do you mean that one main dry sounding synth that I've got going throughout the song, or the really wet (that's what she said lol) bell in the beginning?
If you mean the bell, I agree. That thing was annoying and I was really close to taking it out. I was thinking of switching it to a pad, and having it play those generic notes in the background.
I don't think I'm gonna redo this one though, I have 2 other projects going on atm.
At 1:49, do you mean the breakdown? Or just the clap? It was the first time I tried something like that, and I like the way it turned out.
I thought my melodies were decent, and I couldn't think of many better ones in that chord progression...as for focusing on the percussion, that WOULD be cool to try, but I dunno if there's much you can do with a kick, hat, and clap :P
Thanks for the review, I'll keep everything you said in mind. See ya around.
pretty cool
i can recognize it now... i remember some other people on newgrounds redoing this song. it's nice and i think this particular one has a nice feel. however I really think you should get rid of the little click on every note, it sounds like a two year old with really good rhythm walking in an open empty room, or perhaps an old guy with no teeth trying to smack his lips together... hope i described it right. but yeah, i think you should get rid of it.
4/5 b/c i think you can elaborate on it... perhaps a few other instruments thrown in there?
-crepth
I don't hear any clicks through my speakers, so I'm not sure what you're talking about. It may just be your speakers/sound card.
If you're talking about the plucking of the strings, it's a harp. It's supposed to sound like that, I think it's quite nice and fits the melody perfectly.
Also, like the title says, it's a demo. Once I map the rest of the notes out I'll definitely add some more atmosphere.
Glad you liked it.
(Also, the chorus isn't playing at all or just really softly in the version you just listened to. I just reuploaded with the chorus.)
nice job.
i loved the beginning in this. nice and smooth and then that hard sharp stutter percussion comes in. i think you had a nice coordination with instruments and perc in the latter half. however maybe you should have elaborated on that ending section. s'not too late either. good job. 'n i think you've inspired me to make my own stutter beat.
4/5 only because i thought some bass wouldn't hurt.
-crepth
Yea the ending was sort of a last minute thing. I didnt want to deter away from the mood of the song too much, but it looks like thats what i did. Yea, some bass wouldn't hurt. Lately my music program is deleting half my shit, so i try to get stuff finished quick. If its not all gone by now, i'll see about working on it some more. Yea dude, stutter beats are fun.. I'm just getting into them.
Good luck with your stuff
And thank you for your review.
pretty sweet
sounds a little retro with the quality. i was wondering, where did you find that tomtom. it would sound perfect for this 80's style song im trying to make.
4/5
-crepth
it's actually from the GM bank that comes with windows.
just do a search for .sf2
everything pre-vista and after '95 should have it.
i liked it up until
you introduced that new compressed synth. wayyyyy off tune and kinda off rhythm. the beginning was really nice though. loved the syncopation with the hats. ... k, listenin' around the 2 minute mark now.... and im likin' it. nice driving beat kinda cool synth and the background thing sounds like it has some flanger maybe is a little overpowering and turned up too much... -building up now. i think those crashes were cheap. maybe some more reverb on that. k. now you introduced that "choir"... not bad but its still the same idea. maybe you should have changed it up a bit more by this point. and now it stopped- o.O uhmm. i think you should have had a more conclusive ending. and now im listening to my favorite part, the beginning. honestly i think you should have stuck with the beginning thing.
sorry for a abnormal review but it was long enough that i could do that. hope i made it clear that i enjoyed it though.^^
4/5
-crepth
Really great review! Thanks for going into such depth - much appreciated.
I totally agree with you on ALL factors but the only thing which didn't quite sit right with me was the part about you liking the beginning! lol! I find I'm a little ashamed when I hear it, lol!
I'm still only at amateur level with all the tunes I compose but with these kind of responses I can improve all the time. Cheers!
you're right...
you DON't have to say F*** every other word, but you need to enunciate and not use gay lyrics like we party hard in the yard...
its just the same stupid rap melody for2 minutes with you trying to record you voice (add variety). and dont end songs with this is "blank" out.
i think that was constructive enough, so don't complain that i was mean or something.
1/5
Hmmm...you seemed very open-minded about your review. Therefore, I respond. I do admit that I tend to slur my words most the time. As for the lyrics, my friend helped me write them. And as I stated above, it's not my background beat - it's Zajed's. If I can find a good singer/rapper to do collaborate with me, I wouldn't have to do it myself. But, none of my friends have very good voices that are suitable for rapping. I may do a remade version of the lyrics, but I don't know yet. The ideas mainly came to me and my friend when we were drinking a couple of sodas. *Sighs* Oh, well...it was worth a shot. By the way does anyone know of a good rapper besides J-Kellz here on Newgrounds that could do a few vocal shots for me? If so, please PM me. Peace out, Neon-Crepth...
- Jake Alexis Steele
damn yo...
i loved that intro, so smooth and the vocals are very well used. after the intro however i don't think it was strong enough. more kick in that part. percussion besides that was pretty good. more bass definitely, that was the thing its missing the most. cool instrument around :43 the instruments are good. but i can see this song being the same thing over and over and just switching instruments. get a larger variety in the melody. it's great now, but needs more variety and it's on its way to being awesome. pm when you submit it.
4/5
-crepth
Not strong enough... I agree. And your absolutly right about its repetivity, not now (in its 1 minute stage), but you can see it happening... I expect to add some more energy to the main melody... after the sidechained secondary melody I'll probably add a 20 - 30 second break with some nice light pads or something not really sure... Thanks for the advice, I appreciate it.. and yeah ill definitly pm you when its finished.. peace
sweet man
at first i thought that dryness was only a fading intro, but then it stuck out through out the whole song...
repost this song with it fading in to normal dryness and wetness. still definitely have it sound like it does now in the intro though. i think that would make for a much better song.
4/5
-crepth
Thanks, I might do that, or I might just make a entirely different song.
sweet!
yeah, i thought of donkey kong country underwater level too! perfect job getting across that feel, like with the echoing percussion. the strings that came in at like 2/3rds was really nice.
maybe you should have made that bass less pangy and a little dryer. idk, just me.
5/5
-crepth
It's possible. I will be trying a few things with the remix I'm working.
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